Monday, November 12, 2012


America: Learn How to Drink

Moderation…Moderation…Moderation. To lower or not to lower the drinking age—that’s the question. Despite overwhelming opinions against lowering the drinking age in the U.S., this public health issue is still worthy of debate as more data and public opinions are shared.  There is always room for compromise.

Once upon time, drinking ages were staggered for beer and wine vs. harder liquors like whiskey, vodka, rum.  Maybe it’s time to return to yester-year. Now, progressive trends among states’ citizens are on the rise with recent rulings like legalizing recreational and medical marijuana. Maybe it’s time to take off the restraints. Cops are raiding bars, house parties and public parking lots for underage drinking. Maybe it’s time to better educate on drinking in moderation and with informed level of responsibility.

The United States is the only country, in the western hemisphere, with a legal drinking age of 21. We cannot purchase alcohol of any kind of and of course drink, yet 80% of people under the age of 21 have had a drink and “in a national survey, 95% of 12th graders report that it is fairly easy or very easy to get alcohol”.[1] Including the fact that most teenagers have had alcohol, at least once in their life, most teenagers have had a drink because of binge drinking. Binge drinking has become a growing trend since the late 1990s. “More than 90% of all alcohol consumed by underage drinkers is consumed during binge drinking.”[2]



The opposing arguments to lower the drinking age:

Religious-based views using Judeo-Christian teachings that call the act a sin and prohibits alcohol consumption
Health concerns, both physical and mental on the young, developing body and mind
Social & public behavior (including drunk driving) that go against decency laws and contribute to traffic accidents and fatalities




The supporting arguments to lower the drinking age:
Model other countries restrictions -- allowing “softer” liquors at one age level and the “harder” liquors at older age level;
Regulated environments for underage drinking to decrease binge drinking and concealment of the behavior;
Better education on drinking responsibly and with moderation since alcohol industry is a significant part of the U.S. sports and entertainment lifestyle.



Going for the kinder and gentler approach—the message is to limit alcohol, think moderation, be responsible. Take the hypocrisy out of the equation with free flow of alcohol and fun are intertwined for adults and not expect underage drinkers not to follow.





[1] Monitoring the Future, 2002. U.S. Department of Health and Human Services, National Institutes of Health.
[2] Office of Juvenile Justice and Delinquency Prevention. Drinking in America: Myths, Realities, and Prevention Policy. Washington, DC: U.S. Department of Justice, Office of Justice Programs, Office of Juvenile Justice and Delinquency Prevention, 2005.

4 comments:

  1. Topic sentence - your first topic sentence is by far the best topic sentence I have read. It was very well written in my opinion. your other topic sentences were good as well.

    Support - I thought that your supports were okay.

    Transitions - I thought that maybe you could have better transitions.

    Quote - You had two quotes based my understanding and I liked how you had cited them.

    Grammar and spelling - I found one error with the use of ";" otherwise it was just fine.

    Strong Argument - I thought your central argument was strong.

    I liked your pictures. I really liked your opening paragraph. Some of your paragraphs/sentences were too wide as far as spacing between them goes, try to fix that.

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  2. Topic Sentence- Your topic sentence definitely grabs the reader's attention! Actually, all of your topic sentences do that. Good job!
    Support- Good supports, they give you good information.
    Transitions- I thought your transitions were really good, I like the word choice in the beginning of every paragraph.
    Quote- Awesome way of quoting. I like how it looks really neat and organized.
    Grammar- Fine with me!
    Strong argument- You can definitely get someone to take your side.

    Nice pictures by the way!

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  3. Gabby-
    I loved the first topic sentence, very clever. The other topic sentences were very good. I thought the support was okay. You might need a little more. The transitions need some work; need a little more flow, but overall okay. I enjoyed the quotes and thought they were placed and cited very well. Grammar and spelling seemed good to me. I liked the argument it seemed to be strong. And the pictures really helped with the read; gave it a bubbly atmosphere. Over all I think it was well done.

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  4. Gabby
    Topic Sentences: Your first topic sentence was a great hook into your paper, though the flow following the first sentences could use slightly more connection to the idea of there always being room for compromise. Otherwise they work well in directing the argument.
    Support: You may consider looking at how countries that educate rather than prohibit do better. Do these countries have a lower rate of alcohol poisoning among teenagers? These figures could help support your conclusion.
    Transitions: The blog flows well between the first three paragraphs, but lacks cohesion with the two lists immediately following. I would consider writing these points in a paragraph form to fix this issue.
    Quotes: The quotations you picked here were appropriately related to the topic and did well to prop up your argument. Further explanation regarding the significance of the quotes would help integrate them more effectively.
    Grammar and Spelling: Aside from the note form of two sections of the blog post, there were not discernable egregious errors.
    Strong Argument: You have the strong framework for a compelling argument, which is what an intro is supposed to provide. I would try and connect the steps of the argument more so it is a whole skeleton rather than separate fragments.
    You have constructed a well-put together argument that has the potential to be both convincing and compelling. For the argument to fully fulfill its potential however, try uniting the pieces to bring cohesion to the jigsaw of evidence.

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